Avalon Stevenson- Daughter of Aphrodite

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Name: Avalon Stevenson

Age: 15

God Parent: Aphrodite

Mortal Family: Her father, Marcus Stevenson and her step-mom Erica Boyle- Stevenson.

Years in Camp: Three

History: Avalon grew up in Arizona, her dad was a dermatologist. It was just her and her dad until she was six, but those six years were hard for both of them. They would do almost everything together, and she would even tell him how to do her hair. Avalon was in first grade, she was six, when her dad hired a babysitter for her for the first time. For a couple months, Saturday nights were spent with her babysitter Carly, braiding hair and screeching along to disney movies. In school Avalon was okay, she got a lot of B's but loved her subjects. When her dad took her out for dinner, she didn't expect to meet her dad's girlfriend. It was a bit awkward for her at first, but things smoothed out and she really liked being around Erica. Their family get closer from there, and Erica was officially her step-mom when Avalon was 11. The next year basilisks has infested the plumbing at her school, and she had been attacked. Her dad had to explain to her that, yes her mom was alive, yes Erica knew, and no she isn't alone. He took her on a road trip to New York right after school ended, taking her to Camp.

Physical Appearance: She's technically average height - 5'3" - but her friends and family always make short jokes about her. She's not as tan as someone would expect, but she does have freckles dotting the bridge of her nose. Despite the baby fat she has great cheekbones, and full lips. Her nose is slightly upturned, the bridge straight. She has thick, even eyebrows above brown-green eyes. Her build is more athletic and small, less voluminous as some of her half-sisters. She has long brown hair in layers, but she either leaves it down or in a ponytail.

Personality: Avalon is extremely independent, and rarely asks for help. If she does, it's more commanding than polite. Bad jokes are her thing, and she tells them often. She has emotions like the wind, and has heavy amounts of pride.

Fatal Flaw: Hubris, pride.

Talents: She's good at adapting to any social environment. Avalon can change how she stands and holds herself based on the crowd she is in front of.

Weapons: A Celestial Bronze dagger she keeps strapped to her thigh.

[Axel The Bunny]

It's not too bad here. You only have a few real problems that need to be addressed.

The first is with your history. You've been at camp for awhile, so you need to add that.

Personality is too brief, expand it.

Fatal Flaw needs to be explained, how does this flaw affect her? How can it prove fatal?

fix those things and you should be good.